Walt: Explain what we did in holidays by making a holidays recount.
I found it hard to find descriptive words and find a simple and plain background.
I found it easy to write my draft in my literacy book.
Maybe next time I could make it more detailed.
Kia ora Unaiki,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading about your dance performance and the way you used the five senses to make your writing descriptive. Maybe next time you could work on making your writing easier to read and proofreading. Blog ya later! Ms Peters.
Kia ora Nike it´s Dylan, I enjoyed reading your Holiday recount it sounded like you were stressed while you were dancing! Maybe next time you could proofread your work. Anyway keep up the great work, blog ya later.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Dylan thank you for your feed back and feed forward on my blog post. Next time I will make sure the proof read my work. Yes I was a little stressed while I was dancing.Blog ya later.
DeleteHi Nike, it's Alice. I like how descriptive your writing is. Maybe next time you could get rid of those lines under your words.
ReplyDeleteBlog you later.